Hey guys I’m working on a thing real quick… do you remember this submission?
You or may or may not remember it’s a thing I personally made myself (shocking I know) and I’m working on a thing involving it. Anyway long story short I’m looking to tune up the gentlemanly grammar of this… for example words like “thine” are used incorrectly in places, etc.
Anyway if you guys could make some suggestions as to what should be corrected in this particular submission, it would be greatly appreciated!
Thanks!
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Posted by Shawn Handyside on June 22, 2012 · 6:42 PM
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Um… Will I get killed if I mention Meet the Pyro is out on Monday?
There is a disturbing lack of puns involving how you are witholding forums from us…
I can only assume it's going to be a very well done version of the original theme song with these words. So far all I've seen of it on Youtube are shitty readings with the music in the background.
Lemme guess, the upload to 9GAG shamed you into wanting to fix the post.
It's worrying when those troglodytes are calling out your olden grammatical skills.
http://wiki.teamfortress.com/wiki/ARG Sorry gentlemen, BUT MEET THE PYRO ON MONDAY!!
It is not a stress-inducing product of misfunction, Shawn.
To talk on the topic related to this imagery found on one area of the crossing streams of data found to be continental-spread:
<img src="http://www.halolz.com/wp-content/uploads/2010/12/halolz-dot-com-pokemon-raichu-raisay.jpg">
Since I do not espy any helpful advice here, I shall dispense.
All the "thines" should be replaced with "thee" except for the line "Thine spirit is so steadfast"
That's all that I can recognize and that might not even be correct. I tried. :/
I wish to become the unquestionable champion,
Unlike any gentlemen who has hitherto existed,
To encapsulate the alternative existential fauna is my true endeavor,
To discipline the aforementioned is my motive.
I shall traverse this vast plain of existence,
My search conducted distantly and thoroughly,
Educating my portable atrocities to fathom,
The faculty possessed inwardly.
Portable Atrocities!
(Must be encapsulated en masse!)
Indubitably myself and thee,
With certainty, I am destined for such,
Portable Atrocities!
Verily, thou art my greatest ally,
Residing together within this great macrocosm in need of protection.
Portable Atrocities!
(Must be encapuslated en masse!)
Your tempered spirit remains steadfast,
Our valor will ensure passage to safe harbour
Thou shall tutor mine own self and I shall reciprocate,
Portable Atrocities!
Must be encapsulated en masse!
(Must be encapsulated en masse!)
All trials that arise throughout my journey,
Will be met with fortitude,
To verily confront foes with great frequency,
To assert my deserved position.
Join me in thy quest, as the moment is fortuitous,
A greater ensemble thou shalt not find,
Hand in hand we shall triumph in this conquest,
For that has been my ultimate aspiration.
Portable Atrocities!
(Must be encapsulated en masse!)
Indubitably myself and thee,
With certainty, I am destined for such,
Portable Atrocities!
Verily, thou art my greatest ally,
Residing together within this great macrocosm in need of protection.
Portable Atrocities!
(Must be encapuslated en masse!)
Your tempered spirit remains steadfast,
Our valor will ensure passage to safe harbour
Thou shall tutor mine own self and I shall reciprocate,
Portable Atrocities!
Must be encapsulated en masse!
Must be encapsulated en masse!
Portable Atrocities!
Now when do I get paid?
"GENTLEMON"
<img src="http://sphotos.xx.fbcdn.net/hphotos-prn1/c0.0.300.300/p403x403/534252_438829479463411_1618905794_n.jpg">
"GENTLEMON"
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Ah sweet sweet history. I was so excited when I got to pull this one back up a little while ago.
Shawn if you want I can give it to my dad to give a look at it. He does Shakespearean plays and used to be a full time teacher. He'd probably know a bit